📝 The question the sample test taker answered:
Some people believe that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school,
while others believe they should begin at secondary school. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
6.5
Band
Writing Task 2 (Academic) — Your Result
You answered the question fully and organised your ideas well. Grammar slips and repeated simple words are what stand between you and Band 7.
📊 Score Breakdown
TR
Task Response
6.5
✓ What you did wellYou discussed both views and gave a clear opinion, exactly as the question asked.
✗ What went wrongYour second body paragraph gave two ideas but only explained one of them with an example.
→ How to improveFor every main idea, add one short example. Ask yourself: "Can I picture this?" If not, add an example.
CC
Coherence and Cohesion
7
✓ What you did wellYour paragraphs follow a clear order, and linkers like "On the one hand" guide the reader well.
✗ What went wrongYou started three sentences in a row with "Also". This makes the writing feel repetitive.
→ How to improveLearn two more ways to add ideas: "Furthermore" and "In addition". Use a different one each time.
LR
Lexical Resource
6
✓ What you did wellYou used some strong phrases like "native-like pronunciation" and "a wide range of".
✗ What went wrongYou used "important" six times, and "knowledges" is not a real word — "knowledge" never takes an "s".
→ How to improveMake a small list: "important" = "essential", "vital", "crucial". Use each one once in your next essay.
GRA
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.5
✓ What you did wellYou used complex sentences with "although" and "because" correctly in several places.
✗ What went wrongSmall slips appeared: "a child absorb", "more longer", and "confuse to them". Each one costs marks.
→ How to improveAfter writing, check every verb once: does the subject match? "A child absorbs", "children absorb".
🔍 Your Response — Error Analysis
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Good writing (hover to see why)
It is often debated whether children should begin studying a foreign language at primary school or wait until secondary school. Some peoples argue
GRA
"People" is already plural. Never add "s".
Some people argue
that an early start is best, while others prefer a later beginning. In my opinion, learning a language early brings greater benefits. On the one hand,CC
A clear linking phrase that organises your ideas well.
there are reasons to wait. Young children already have to learn reading, writing and mathematics, and adding one more subject may confuse to themGRA
"Confuse" takes the object directly. No "to" is needed.
may confuse them
. Also, secondary school students can study a new language more seriously, because they are more mature and can concentrate during long timeGRA
To talk about how long something lasts, use "for".
for a long time
. On the other hand,CC
Perfect way to introduce the opposite view.
young children have a special ability to learn languages. A child absorb new sounds very quicklyGRA
One child = "absorbs". The verb must match the subject.
A child absorbs new sounds very quickly
and can often speak without a strong accent later in life. Research suggests that early learners usually develop native-like pronunciationLR
A precise, less common phrase. Excellent word choice.
. Also, starting early gives students more longer time to practiseGRA
Never use "more" together with an "-er" word.
a much longer time to practise
before their important examinations begin. As my point of viewLR
This phrase is not natural English.
From my point of view
, an early start is clearly better. Children who begin at primary school have a wide range ofLR
A strong academic phrase — much better than "many".
chances to practise, and they are able to get many knowledges about the languageLR
"Knowledge" never takes an "s" and does not use "many".
to gain a lot of knowledge about the language
in a natural way. Also, early learning builds confidence, which helps children in every subject, not only in languages. In conclusion, although both views have merit, I believe primary school is the ideal time to begin, because childhood offers learning advantages that can never be repeated later in life. 🎯 Your Top 3 Priorities
1
Check every verb after writing: one person = verb with "s", many people = verb without "s".
→ Doing this can move your Grammar from Band 6.5 to Band 7.5.
2
Replace repeated simple words. "Important" appeared six times — swap in "essential", "vital", "crucial".
→ Doing this can move your Vocabulary from Band 6.0 to Band 7.0.
3
Give one short example for every main idea. One sentence starting with "For example," is enough.
→ Doing this can move your Task Response from Band 6.5 to Band 7.0.
✏️ Example of Band 7 Writing for This Question
There is ongoing debate about the ideal age for children to begin learning a foreign language. While some parents favour waiting until secondary school, I firmly believe that an early start at primary level is far more beneficial. Young children absorb new sounds effortlessly, and this natural ability fades with age. For example, students who start English at the age of six frequently develop near-native pronunciation, something teenagers struggle to achieve even after years of study...
Your essay has a clear structure and a confident opinion — that is the hardest part, and you already have it. Fix your verb endings and vary your vocabulary, and Band 7 is well within your reach!
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